tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3922722966649601130.post3480770630635501569..comments2023-11-03T11:47:36.441-04:00Comments on The Splintered Realm: Ants Webcomic Process Step TwoDr. Mike Desinghttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03826501692186095437noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3922722966649601130.post-62793320162616659242014-04-03T06:46:59.278-04:002014-04-03T06:46:59.278-04:00Thanks, Jay! Thanks, Jay! Dr. Mike Desinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03826501692186095437noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3922722966649601130.post-17738309272417506192014-04-03T01:23:33.772-04:002014-04-03T01:23:33.772-04:00I also mean the "medic's" dialogue i...I also mean the "medic's" dialogue in the second panel; "But our gear..." should be eliminated. don't make this a crappy TSR module explainen' every little detail, know one cares. Move the narrative.Jay Murphyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00069789456292604679noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3922722966649601130.post-54072886317828681472014-04-03T01:20:50.183-04:002014-04-03T01:20:50.183-04:00My critique; The "captain's" dialogu...My critique; The "captain's" dialogue is perfect. The "medic's" dialogue should only be the first one. His second dialogue should actually be "captain's" as he trails off into death leaving the "medic" with the sidearm and the mission. So I would change the last panel thus; background image of the mound stays the same, the "captain" is prone, all we see is the top of his head while he hands off the sidearm to the "medic". The tall mound in the background gives the visual sense of the monumental task which the "medic" has just inherited. Jay Murphyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00069789456292604679noreply@blogger.com